Outline
A boy name Chirag- lived in an Orphanage- wanted to become a cricketer- he had nothing to motivate himself - his parents was not with him except a bat- he used to call - Dhoni's magical bat - always used to play with this - a poor man gave him this bat- would score many runs believing it magical bat- he would love it more than himself- one day one team selecter saw him playing well- asked to Chirag- join our team- took a test of Chirag- he cleared- got the chance to play with a new team- he got famous with his batting- in every matches he scored runs- one day he lost his bat- he was upset and terrified- thinking how he would go to play- his lucky bat was not with him- this news spread everywhere- a call came to Chirag from his friend- he got to know that someone stolen- he was his friend- he was praying him to back it- then a person forced him to go to play- he picked different bat - on the stadium he thought that today he can't score more run- but he tried- but couldn't score more- he went to ask that bat from his friend- his friend was jealous to him- his friend didn't give him and broke it- his friend was happy that now he couldn't be successful- he(Chirag) went back- his another team member (Mohan) asked what happened- he shared everything- Mohan said "relax! nothing is like that"- I replaced the bat- and put different- but after a few moments- I put it back- you played with your original bat- but didn't score- not ready with mentally- it was your confidence not bat
It's a really nice outline when I read it I just remembered one movie that name is chai khuli ke main khuli.
ReplyDeleteThankyou Khusboo.
DeleteTo some extent you are right I took the exposition part from that. But I changed all the parts of plot and made it a different one with different rising action, climax, falling action and resolution.
Story was actually superb and relevant.
ReplyDeleteYou need to proofread somewhere I found mistake of sentence structure.
Overall the story was too awesome.
Thankyou for your useful feedback. I'll work on that.
DeleteWow! Rohit l like your story, the way you have discribed whole story it is amazing. I could not find any mistake in your script.
ReplyDeleteThank You so much for writing a motivational story.
Thankyou so much Rakhi.
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